Hey I wrote a thing is it any good?

I wrote this for class.
The assignment was to write a screen play so on the day of the class I suddenly woke up at 2 in the morning, hit my head against the keyboard for three hours, and went back to bed. This is what was in my computer afterwards.

https://dl.dropbox.com/u/80180343/misc/A%20scene%20from%20an%20unnamed%20story%20about%20a%20goblin.pdf

A review would be cool I guess
I'm a little proud

Loosely based off of this game, which is free so you can try it if you got time to kill
http://crawl.develz.org/wordpress/